I need someone to do an revised final paragraph according to the draft paragraph below.
The Beatles is perhaps one of the greatest Rock & Roll bands ever. The two most popular members of the group were it’s frontsmen John Lennon and Paul McCartney.John came from a broken family in Liverpool, UK. He started the group with Paul. John played rhythm guitar and provided main and supporting vocals. After hundreads of hit singles and platinum albums, Lennon married a Japanese singer Yoko Ono and became a father. After five years , Lennon finally released a double album “ Double Fantasy” in 1980. A few weeks after its release, he was shot and killed by a psychotic fan “ Mark Chapman, out side his apartment building in NYC. “Strawberry fields forever”, Help” ,“Imagine’etc. remain some of his best songs. Paul McCartney, also from Liverpool, formed the band with John. Paul played bass guitar and provided both main and supporting vocals. His songs were initially romantic ballads but later songs such as “ Yesterday’, “ Nowhere Man” and ‘Eleanor Rigby” gave Paul an all around identity . After the break up, Paul has had the most successful solo career. He lives in the UK , was knighted by the Queen and is a billionaire. After John’s death, the beatles fans divided into Lennon & McCartney fans, the campaign being started by the media.The music of the Beatles was such that their hits contained both the McCartney exuberance and Lennon’s experimentation. A beatles song came out of the individual personalities of John, Paul, George and Ringo. Saying Paul or John is better than the others is equivalent to comparing apples and oranges.
Below you will find the guidelines.
Choose something you enjoy, like music, movies, TV, books, a sport, etc. Pretend you are a reporter (film critic, food critic, sports writer, etc.) Write a paragraph explaining why one thing is better or more important than the other thing. For example, if your love movies, write a paragraph explaining why one movie is a better than another movie. Or, explain why one character plays a better villain than another character. Be careful not to let your enthusiasm get the best of you. Don’t just compare/contrast the two things. Explain WHY one is better or more important than the other. Also, don’t assume your audience knows about your subject. Don’t assume your audience knows the two people you are comparing/contrasting are rap artists.
The paragraph should consist of a well-developed paragraph, which means: you need a topic sentence, supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence (clincher). The paragraph should be unified and coherent with specific supporting details or examples for support. It should provide sentence variety (simple, compound, and complex sentences). The sentences should be clear, concise, and arranged in a logical order. Transitional words and phrases should be used to provide coherence. Choose one point of view: first, second, or third person
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